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  1. Hi Brooklin! What a cool idea to focus on hybrid mythological creatures! Aside from mermaids, I don't know much about the other two creatures that your storybook will cover (fauns and harpies), so I thought your Introduction was very helpful for establishing what kind of creatures I'll be reading about next. If anything, I wanted a little more information in the Introduction--something to help me understand what kind of stories you'll be telling. Will it be from the perspective of these creatures? From someone who encounters them? Some combination of the two? I really liked the question that you used to end your Introduction, because it really left me wanting to know whether or not these creatures will be good or bad! If I had to make a prediction, I'm guessing that each of the creatures will be a bit grey instead of black or white, but I'm looking forward to seeing where your stories go next!

  2. Hello Brooklin!
    I’m curious to see how your stories are going to play out and display both sides of hybrid creatures. Hybrid creatures not only have the natural duality of both two creatures combined together, but also the duality of their behavior. Mermaids are definitely the most well-known, and have featured as beautiful maidens who just want to be friends to makers of mischief who lure sailors to their deaths. Are you planning on using various fictional examples and some real history? I think it would be kind of cool to see how people’s perspectives of these creatures have changed overtime, both in literature and among the common folk. I know a little about harpies, but I think it’ll be fun to learn a bit more about them through your stories. Your image on the introduction is a perfect example of some of the less pretty encounters between hybrid creatures and man. The statue actually depicts a pretty famous scene from mythology, depicting just how wild centaurs can get with some wine! I’m super excited to see where you go with your stories!

  3. Hey Brooklin,
    I really like that you are diving deeper into these hybrid creatures. Similarly, I do not know a whole lot about them outside of their movie and video game portrayals. Pirates of the Caribbean: On Stranger Tides seems to portray both sides of mermaids. They can be manipulative and violent but also kind and caring. Fauns are almost always protagonists, and harpy's are almost always antagonists. I look forward to see how you represent them! Are you considering integrating themes, characters, or plots from movies with these creatures in them? I think that could be interesting to see you write about established characters. However, reading new characters that you create would be a great way to see your creativity. Your introduction is great! I appreciate how you give brief explanations of the three creatures. Are you going to intertwine their stories? Or, are they each going to have their own separate story set apart? I'm looking forward to reading if the good or bad prevail. Great idea and good luck, Brooklin

  4. Hi Brooklin!
    Focusing on hybrid creatures is a very interesting storybook idea, one I do not think a lot of people have done. I personally know more about mermaids and harpies than I do about fauns. I think that portraying both sides of mermaids and fauns is a good way to show that how people interpret them matters. Are you going to talk about sirens as well as mermaids? People tend to use those terms interchangeably, even though sirens can also be half bird half human and look more like a harpy than a mermaid. Are you going to talk about these creatures from their point of view, or someone else’s point of view? Are you going to go more for the interpretations from myths, or are you going to pull interpretations of these hybrids from fictional stories like Narnia, or Percy Jackson? I look forward to reading the rest of your Storybook!

  5. Hello Brooklin,
    I think you picked a topic that is pretty ripe for creative manipulation as you could literally take this anywhere, especially writing in the first person! In your introduction, I was wowed by your inclusion of how these creatures were portrayed in antiquity. I always appreciate a little background info and history! I also like that you included wiki links to these creatures so that we can read a little more. I'm curious if you looked at creatures on Theoi or Wiki and picked, or where did you get the inspiration to pick these three creatures? Also, I'll be honest, I'm kinda hoping you can intertwine the stories in some way! I'm a sucker for a good series, especially if it's involving greek/roman myth. Did you read Percy Jackson as a kid? I noticed that all your animals are half human... "Human-animal chimeras" might be a more applicable phrase for your intro! Looking forward to reading the rest of your storybook!

  6. Hi Brooklin!

    I just read your storybook introduction. First off, I must say that this is such a fun topic! My personal project is specifically over mermaids, so I will definitely be bookmarking your project and coming back to it because I am very excited to see what you write about for mermaids!

    I think taking an informal approach with your introduction was a good choice! It gives your readers a brief overview of the hybrid creatures you'll be writing over, especially harpies. Because I have heard of both mermaids and fauns before but harpies are a new one, so I'm thankful for this description!

    I also like the idea of telling each story about the hybrid creature from the perspective of that creature to showcase their personalities! So often when we think of these mythological creatures the aspect of what their personality is doesn't even come up. I think your approach will be a great way to go against that grain. I'm excited to read your stories!

  7. Brooklin,
    I just read the introduction and "Mermaids" from your storybook. Overall, I think the concept of your storybook is going to make for a good one when it's complete.
    Having watched The Little Mermaid several times as a kid (like I'm sure so many of us have), I really enjoyed reading the mermaid tale because I already had some sense of familiarity with the story and the creature. I also learned something new; I thought mermaids were the sweet and innocent creatures that the Disney movie depicts them as, so I was surprised to learn about their manipulative side. And the way you presented this from Ariel's point of view was fresh, captivating, and humorous at times.
    One thing you mentioned in your author's note is, there is an "original dark version" of a mermaid tale. Just out of curiosity, what is this original version exactly? (from what culture, time period, etc.) I am interested to know more and whether this version shares some similarities to the deceptive character you created in your story. Perhaps this is some additional info you could add to the author's note if others inquire as well.

  8. Hi Brooklin, I enjoyed reading your storybook introduction and your first story! Your introduction did a fantastic job of introducing the types of creatures that you will be focusing on in your story as well as describing exactly how your stories will be told. The links in your introduction to each individual creature is very helpful, especially if the reader wanted to know more about the creature other than what was included in your description of the creature. As for your story, I loved the way that you retold the story of the Little Mermaid. It took something that a lot of people are familiar with and gave it a complete twist by making Ariel evil. As I continued to read, your story did an excellent job of really making the reader have a different perspective on Ariel as you described each one of her evil acts. Overall, a really good beginning to your storybook and I am excited to learn more about the other hybrid creatures.

  9. Hi Brooklyn!
    I really enjoyed your storybook introduction and first story! Besides mermaids, I was unfamiliar with the other two hybrid animals you plan to talk about, so the introduction was very helpful in providing me with a baseline of knowledge to base your stories off of. I grew up watching The Little Mermaid, probably like most of us here, but I had zero idea there was ever an original "dark" version of the movie. Reading through your story does play out the rumor that mermaids are manipulative and I think you did a very good job at sticking with that whole theme throughout. Looking back through your story, I seem to be leaving with a new perspective of Ariel – that there even was an "evil" version of her and truly that mermaids aren't as sweet and innocent as Ariel was always made out to be in the Disney film.

  10. Hey Brooklyn!
    I love the concept of your storybook! Out of the three creatures you're telling about, I'm only familiar with mermaids. Thanks Disney! I used to watch the little mermaid all the time haha. Crazy to think that they were so kind in that story but everywhere else they're so scary! Thank you for describing the other creatures in your introduction. Super cool that there are so many creatures out there that I have never heard of! It was cool that you brought in the NY Times for the mermaid story, it made it sound more official and realistic. Nicely done!

  11. Hi Brooklyn! I really like your story idea and I'm looking forward to see what directions you go with it. While I do love a good heartwarming lovey-dovey kind of story, it's always really intriguing when a story does the complete opposite. This is what it feels like these stories will bring to the table, specifically in the first one about mermaids. Do you plan to write all three of them in a New York Times' column format? I thought that was super neat. I'm glad to see you'll be writing about two lesser known creatures as well. I don't know much about fauns or harpies at all and I can't wait to read your stories highlighting how they can both be good and evil creatures. I was slightly confused about the part when the scientists fooled the mermaids. Did they capture one? Who was "her" in that paragraph? Was it Rosaline?

  12. Hey Brooklin! I really like your idea of looking into the three different hybrid creatures! I'm a huge fan of Greek mythology and was so excited to read your intro and first story! I like how you weren't afraid to dig into the darker sides of mermaids. In mythology, they definitely are not what their counterparts are! I wonder if you've ever read the Percy Jackson series by Rick Roirdan? It's a really good look at Greek myths, gods, and monsters in modern day. Anyways, great intro and first story! I did see a few typos, but nothing too major. I can't wait to see what your stories for fauns and harpies will be! Thanks so much for a good story!

  13. Hello Brooklin! I'm back to dive into your author's notes and first story. Virtual high five for finishing your first story and putting in some extra work with the pictures and links! Looks good. I have to say that I was getting flashbacks of Animal Planet's "Mermaids: The Body Found" documentary while reading this. That show scared the s*&t out of 12 year old Grant. Anyways, in your author's note I like that you walked us through how you arrived at the decision to write about the darker side of Mermaids. I think the sinister side of Mermaids definitely makes for a more intriguing story, so good idea on making the switch. My only recommendation would be to change the font style and size of the author's note so that it differs from the body of your story. Other than that, good job and I look forward to reading the next two stories!

  14. Hey Brooklin! I wanted to come back and comment on your Author's note for your storybook. I really like how you included your original thoughts of what you thought you were going to write. It gives us a good insight into what you were thinking originally as a writer. I also like how you included so much information from your source materials. It helps me, because I did not know anything about Flight 19 or any other flight disappearances, for that matter. This really gave me good background information to refer back to when I read the story again. It was also great that you included the Trinidad story too. Because of your story, I'm really interested in going back and reading that. I am very excited to see how you write your other stories and how you will utilize Author's notes to explain everything.

  15. Hi Brooklin,
    Your storybook is so creative! I like how the contrast between light and dark sides of the creatures also kind of parallels how their bodies are made up of two different animals. Your storybook was also very informative—the wikipedia links you have throughout everything are really helpful. Writing from the perspective of the New York Times also makes your writing sound factual. For the mermaid story, I liked how you described the whole evolution of the story in the author's note. I also liked the detail of how mermaids can transform their appearances—I hadn't heard that before. For the design of your website, you might want to center everything under the banner images. I also noticed the "Faun" page didn't have image information yet. Overall great work!

  16. Hi Brooklin,

    This is my second time viewing your storybook. I bookmarked it after the introduction and was excited to return to it when given the opportunity.

    Reading through your mermaids section, I love the creative approach you took to discuss mermaids! This news report format makes it so much more intriguing and pulls the reader in in a great way. It also works great as an explanatory tool, referencing how many people think of "The Little Mermaid" when they think of mermaids and debunking that perception in this form really does a great job at explaining mermaids in folklore. I think the choice to focus on the darkside of mermaids was great and different from what people have heard about mermaids, thus works really well to create a unique perspective.

    It might not be a bad idea to either bold the phrase "Author's Note:" or skip a few more lines just so there is clear separation. I'm going back and forth between your storybook and comment wall currently, and it took me a second to find the author's note when I returned to your page.

    Overall, great work!

  17. Hey Brooklyn,

    I thought your concept was super cool! I like that your inspiration for your storybook comes from something that you have seen in our storytelling today. Your examples being Harry Potter, and the little mermaid. I also love how you started with the more popular creature to draw in attention and then go to other creatures that are a bit more obscure so that we as the reader get to learn more from your storybook as well. If I had to give a bit of criticism I would say that you could definitely break up your information a little bit more. Whether that be including pictures of what these creatures look like or how they are described to look like. You give a good background, but if you had some examples of what they are supposed to be it makes it a little more real for the reader. For example: the Faun image you have is a statue of a man playing an instrument, the mermaid page has the mermaid tail at the header too! I think if you used the same kind of image like you had for the Harpies image, it could be more cohesive and understandable for the readers!

  18. Hi Brooklin!
    Your introduction was informative and did a great job in setting up the premise of your portfolio. I liked that you gave a brief description on every creature that would be presented, as I had forgotten some small details and it was helpful to be reminded of things. Your concept of writing on these creatures in the form of New York Times articles is a great idea, and I enjoyed learning about the various hybrids in an informative format where it felt like they were the real deal. The first story on mermaids was especially enjoyable as it taught me a little on the history of mermaids, the perception of them in the public eye, and then informing us on what they were really like. This story could have used an image comparing the idea of a mermaid to the real form of one in a side by side comparison. It would have added to the credibility of the article.


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